this weekend we are asking for a thirty-three word free-write. Any topic, any style--just give us your best thirty three.
This weekend's challenge
is community judged.
My Submission:
Slivering silver scaled snake
Guarding garden grounds gate
Waiting watching wandering.
Looking for a lunchtime lizard
To eat.
Hovering hungry hawk high
Spy, swoop, stolen by surprise.
Talons take flight.
Laughing lucky lizard.
Guess he should have been looking for the hawk too. Fun!
ReplyDeletehunger pangs focused his attention ;) Thanks for the comment ted.
DeletePerfect. Laughing Lucky Lizard would make a great name for a restaurant too! :D
ReplyDeletethanks linda!
DeleteYou are just a little too clever for your own good, my friend. (I say, as I shake my head and chuckle!) This story is wonderful! I appreciate the thought needed to combine all of the alliteration with such a coherent storyline. Well done, Shawn! :)
ReplyDeleteHa! thanks! your comment is totally appreciated tom! :)
Deleteso glad you enjoyed it jo-anne, I was really hoping to capture lots of action with few words.
ReplyDeleteShawn, this is one little piece of brilliance! I finished reading it with a smile at the cleverness of your 33 words! Well done!
ReplyDeletesmiles rock! thanks Valerie :)
DeleteA narrow escape for that lizard! Love the alliteration and the perfect, tight story--not easy to ratchet up tension in 33 words, but you managed it!
ReplyDeletehe was a lucky lizard temporarily, there was another snake lurking in the garden! thanks for your comment :)
Delete:) nicely done.
ReplyDeletethank you :)
DeleteVery cute working of words here! Thanks for linking up.
ReplyDeletelinking up keeps me from doing what I should be doing...I prefer to call it multi tasking though! thanks!
DeleteExcellent use of language! Poor snake, lucky lizard, happy hawk. Well done sir!
ReplyDeleteThank you Suzanne! I figured it fitting to have 3 characters in 33 words. Glad you dug it :)
DeleteThis is a lot of fun :D
ReplyDeleteYay! Thanks Draug :)
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