Friday, August 2, 2013

Another One

Trifectawritingchallenge.com This weeks challenge is to write 33 words in explanation of this photo.
 
Pink came to visit

To view bricks

Arrived to find gray

Where comfort laid.

Can’t feel a thing,

But sees plenty.

Only shadow,

On the wall.

Wished you were here.

Only split reality.





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19 comments:

  1. AnonymousAugust 2, 2013 at 10:09 AM

    Very good one!

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    1. UnknownAugust 2, 2013 at 11:28 AM

      Thanks! I have been listening to Pink Floyd a lot lately, I was inspired by The Wall...

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  2. AnonymousAugust 2, 2013 at 11:15 AM

    The sad loneliness comes through in the last line...I like the split reality phrase.

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    1. UnknownAugust 2, 2013 at 11:37 AM

      Thank you Janna, especially for noticing the last line, it took me some time to think about how to complete the poem and how to capture the feeling properly. I immediately thought of Pink Floyd's "The Wall" when I saw the picture prompt.

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  3. kymmAugust 2, 2013 at 2:37 PM

    split reality is great.
    love the 'wish you were here' nod, also.
    *nods head to The Wall*

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  4. chamblee54August 2, 2013 at 2:37 PM

    Let no man bring together what the poet has rent asunder.

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    1. UnknownAugust 2, 2013 at 3:55 PM

      Provoked my thoughts, your comment today. My vocabulary has improved since I have been spending so much time in blog. Thank you.

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  5. Valerie BoersmaAugust 2, 2013 at 4:54 PM

    Oh Shawn-wow! This is so amazing! I loved "Arrived to find gray where comfort laid." Very cool language!

    And thank you dearly for you comment on my last post-I'm honored by what you shared with me. Blessings, friend-you sure are a bright spot in the blogging world!

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    1. UnknownAugust 3, 2013 at 11:21 AM

      Glad you liked my take on the photo prompt. Your last post touched me so very much.

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  6. DraugAugust 2, 2013 at 8:27 PM

    Shadows seem to bring out the dreariness...

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    1. UnknownAugust 3, 2013 at 11:22 AM

      True, unless they're shadow puppets being displayed on a tent wall during a fun camping trip!!!!

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  7. Forest BirdAugust 3, 2013 at 2:28 AM

    Not a Pink Floyd fan especially, but am of this!

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  8. DobsonAugust 3, 2013 at 4:53 AM

    I got sad and lonely as well from this photo and it is nicely conveyed by your piece.

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    1. UnknownAugust 3, 2013 at 11:27 AM

      I know! The central shadows' figure was walking, head held low...brought the tone of the photo to a fairly low place. Thanks for your comment Dobson.

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  9. SuzanneAugust 4, 2013 at 8:11 AM

    Beautiful work, Shawn!

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  10. IvyAugust 4, 2013 at 9:19 AM

    "Can’t feel a thing,
    But sees plenty."

    Love this line. Powerful stuff. Great job on the prompt!

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  11. TrifectaAugust 4, 2013 at 3:50 PM

    Oh, you hid a song reference in this one. Great work. Thank you for linking up!

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